Friday, 29 April 2016

Fleet of Darkness




Prologue

            In 2025, Earth has colonized by the “Fleet of Darkness”,  it’s a group of warships in the World War 2 but it has a powerful weapons, unbreakable shield, and can fly by the rocket launcher from the stern of the warship, so ordinary warship and jet fighter of the human can’t destroy it. They have a mental model from the warship. Mental model is a human version from the warship. Many sea and ocean in the earth has managed by them. Because of that, many nation become  weak and their navy forces are afraid to fight with Fleet of Darkness. The global warming also makes human become more afraid, because almost all of the capital city in all nation has flooded by water from the sea. It makes the strength of Fleet of Darkness become more powerful.
          In the Pacific Ocean, the strongest and the main warship Fleet of Darkness “Super Battleship” from Japan, Yamato meets the main warship from the region of United States, “Super Battleship” Iowa. They talk about the United States supplies that will be delivered to Japan.
          “Iowa, can you destroy the supplies from the United States ? I will help you with my unlimited range of radar so you can destroy them with your gun.” Yamato requested.
“As you wish, Yamato.” Iowa agreed.
Then, Yamato makes an electrical waves around her. The hull opens and releases  a big round metals.
“Iowa, lock your gun on the coordinate of 21.301910,-158.106892 and shoot at it.” Yamato ordered.
“Okay, I confirm the coordinate of 21.301910,-158.106892 on O’ahu, Hawaii. I’m ready to shoot that target.” The hull of Iowa opens and releases a huge gun inside of it. Then it’s creates a big nuclear sphere.
“Destroy them all” Yamato smiled.
Iowa fire off the big nuclear sphere and a few seconds later, O’ahu explodes and the smoke of the explosion can be see within range of 500 km.
Chapter 1

          In Kumamoto, General Taki Nakamura the highest general from Japan navy forces is calling General William Gray the highest general from United States navy forces about the delay of the supplies.
          “Hello, Good morning General William Gray, I want to ask you why you cancel your supplies ?” General Taki asked.
“Ahhhh... General Taki Nakamura, my best friend, It’s a long time I haven’t talk with you.” Said General William.
“Please William, I don’t have much time to chit-chat with you. I’m serious now, why do you cancel your supplies ?”
“Okay, Okay, I will disccuss it. I cancel the supplies for another reason and I need your help with your warships and planes.” William requested.
“General William, I refuse your plan to help you because I can’t fight with them if my warships and planes has been destroyed by them. They can’t be destroyed, they are immortal.” Said General Taki Nakamura in the phone.
“Please stay calm general, United States is also trying to find the safe way to distribute the supplies” Said General William.
General Taki screamed, “How I can be calm if the main warship Fleet of Darkness “Super Battleship” Yamato observes our sea”.
“And how we can find the safe way too if the “Super Battleship” Iowa destroy our military headquarters with her powerful gun without we know the position of that battleship.” William replied.
“Okay, I will wait the supplies until next week, but this time if you delay your supplies I will delay the material for the “antimatter” cannon too.” Then Taki close the phone.
Chapter 2

          In Indonesia, there is life an ordinary man, Rexas who have a goal to have his own warship and destroy the Fleet of Darkness. All of his friend are laugh with his goal and no one believe with his goal, but his childhood friend, Vie believe with his goal and support him.
          Someday, Rexas and Vie are going to school together, but Rexas feels someone call his name and he said...
“ Who is calling my name ?”
~TO BE CONTINUED ~

2 comments:

  1. Your story is good and pretty deep because you are uplifting a history about Japan, which is a little bit complicated in ordering the chronological order. Yet, your story still worth to read! Minor things here are: Pay attention to the grammar you use and pay attention to what you are writing on. Thanks! :-)

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  2. Your story is retelling a history right? maybe in my opinion you should use past tense and i think you have some mistakes like "Why are you cancel your supplies?" it should be "why do you cancel" and "Who is call my name?" it should be "who calls my name or who is calling my name" i think thats all from me. Keep it up

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